One Plus One is a Thousand

[nancykbrown]

Dear  (agent)
The first time children see two wild turkeys in their neighborhood they are delighted. When more show up, they want to play. But, when two become hundreds, the trouble begins. Turkeys gobble and chase kids around the block, tease the dog and neighbors. There are too many turkeys.
ONE PLUS ONE IS A THOUSAND is a 475-word picture book, with a humorous perspective on what happens when a non-native animal is introduced in the environment, when efforts to re-balance the environment fail. David Attenborough for four to eight year olds.
I am submitting my work because of your interest in punchy, humorous text with a strong marketing hook. I am an author/illustrator. I value the editorial expertise you bring to your role, and enjoy the work of your clients
I am a member of SCBWI, P2P, in a critique group for fifteen years and have a Master’s in Early Childhood Education.
Please note that this is a simultaneous submission. Thank you for your consideration of my author/illus manuscript, ONE PLUS ONE IS A THOUSAND included below with a PDF dummy.
Sincerely,

[ikmar]

Hi Nancy

Sounds like a great bit of edu-tainment

You may want to bring it closer. What I mean is "children" is distant. It's the difference between

The first time children see two wild turkeys in their neighborhood they are delighted. When more show up, they want to play. But, when two become hundreds, the trouble begins.

and

When two wild turkeys appear in the neighborhood, it's surprising. When two more show up, it's exciting. But, when two become hundreds, the trouble begins.